<div dir="ltr">Caroline,<div><br></div><div>Thanks again.</div><div class="gmail_extra"><br><div class="gmail_quote">2018-01-23 10:31 GMT+09:00 caroline arms <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:caroline.arms@gmail.com" target="_blank">caroline.arms@gmail.com</a>></span>:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0px 0px 0px 0.8ex;border-left:1px solid rgb(204,204,204);padding-left:1ex"><div dir="ltr"><div><div>Murata-san,<br><br>Here are a few thoughts on 8.5.2<br><br>1.<br>I would give this new normative subclause a slightly more helpful heading -- perhaps Relationship Structure. <br><br></div></div></div></blockquote><div>Done.</div><div> </div><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0px 0px 0px 0.8ex;border-left:1px solid rgb(204,204,204);padding-left:1ex"><div dir="ltr"><div><div></div>2. Your 3rd paragraph is<br><br>The <i>target mode</i> of a relationship shall be either internal or external. The target shall be an external resource exactly when the target mode is external.<br><br>I'm not sure the second sentence is necessary. It certainly reads awkwardly. If needed, it might be better as:</div><div>If the target is an external resource, the target mode shall be external.</div><div><br></div></div></blockquote><div><br></div><div>I created two sentences. One is for "internal", while the other is for "external".</div><div> </div><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0px 0px 0px 0.8ex;border-left:1px solid rgb(204,204,204);padding-left:1ex"><div dir="ltr"><div></div><div>3. The last paragraph has a couple of problems.</div><div>a) In "unique within the relationships from the same part" I would use "among" rather than "within" because "relationships" is plural.</div></div></blockquote><div><br></div><div>Done.</div><div> </div><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0px 0px 0px 0.8ex;border-left:1px solid rgb(204,204,204);padding-left:1ex"><div dir="ltr"><div><br></div><div>b) The first sentence is "The identifier of a relationship shall be a name." But "name" might suggest something like a "part name" to someone who has just read earlier parts of clause 8. I see that values for an identifier are constrained to 'the xsd:ID simple type of the W3C Recommendation "XML Schema Part 2: Datatypes."' I checked this normative reference and learned that values for xsd:ID must be an NCNAME. I had to look at the productions for both XML NCName and XML Name to really understand what is going on at a conceptual level. Your use of "name" probably reflected that it has to be an XML Name, but that wasn't obvious to me. I'd like to find a way to qualify or expand on "name" in a way that doesn't get too much into the weeds or find another term. At <a href="http://www.datypic.com/sc/xsd11/t-xsd_ID.htmlI" target="_blank">http://www.datypic.com/sc/<wbr>xsd11/t-xsd_ID.htmlI</a> find " An xsd:ID value must be an NCName. This means that it must start with a letter or underscore, and can only contain letters, digits, underscores, hyphens, and periods" <br>Could we take advantage of this less formal definition for 8.5.2? Or could we just use "string"?</div></div></blockquote><div><br></div><div>I wrote "<span style="font-family:Calibri,sans-serif;font-size:11pt">a string
consisting </span><span style="font-family:Calibri,sans-serif;font-size:11pt">from name characters as defined in XML"</span> </div><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0px 0px 0px 0.8ex;border-left:1px solid rgb(204,204,204);padding-left:1ex"><div dir="ltr"><div><br></div><div>The italics, etc. will need checking. "The" at the beginning of the 4th paragraph is italicized.<br></div><div><br></div></div></blockquote><div><br></div><div>Done.</div><div> </div><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0px 0px 0px 0.8ex;border-left:1px solid rgb(204,204,204);padding-left:1ex"><div dir="ltr"><div></div><div> I hope this helps.</div></div></blockquote><div><br></div><div>Very helpful. Thanks.</div><div><br></div><div>Regards,</div><div>Makoto </div><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0px 0px 0px 0.8ex;border-left:1px solid rgb(204,204,204);padding-left:1ex"><div dir="ltr"><span class="gmail-HOEnZb"><font color="#888888"><div><br></div><div> Caroline<br></div><div><br></div><div><br></div><div><div><br><br></div></div></font></span></div>
</blockquote></div><br><br clear="all"><div><br></div>-- <br><div class="gmail_signature"><br>Praying for the victims of the Japan Tohoku earthquake<br><br>Makoto</div>
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