Notes on latest draft of Part 2

[Arms, Caroline]

All (particularly Rex and Murata-san),

As promised, I have been reading the June MM0619 draft by Murata-san that is on the Assembla site.

Since most of the changes relate to moving most of Annex A into clause 8, I will send notes for clause 8 and Annex A separately -- not immediately.  Below (and attached as a text file) are notes on the other clauses.

1.  Scope

General editorial comments:  
(a) This clause shows several significant deletions.  Somewhat equivalent text is in 7. Overview.  We should check how things will look in the ISO preview (online browsing platform).  Scope will show but I'm not sure that clause 7 would.  We should check whether any text deleted from Scope should be recovered to get relevant words into either Scope or Overview.

(b) The ... bulleted list seems to be temporary.  It definitely needs work for grammatical consistency.

Typo:  "dissiminated" should be "disseminated"

2.  Conformance

General editorial comment:
(a) Could do with improved distinction between statement about conformance for OPC (this part) and conformance in the multi-part standard.

3.  Normative References
Presumably should update the Augmented BNF RFC 4234 to RFC 5234, since 4234 is obsolete.  [Note: New text from Murata-san refers to RFC 2234 (an even older obsolete version) and uses EBNF rather than ABNF.  Presumably all references should use RFC 5234 and "ABNF."]

4.  Terms and Definitions
I notice that some ISO standards have Notes associated with definitions.  If this is acceptable practice we might consider whether any of the terms warrant a note as clarification.

Clearly this a clause to revisit when the rest of the document is done.  The first term confused me but I assume we will make a holistic pass through Terms and Definitions later and haven't reviewed this clause in detail.

access style
style in which local access or networked access is conducted

Proposed replacement: style in which local or networked access to a package is conducted
[Aside: Personally, I might use "mode" rather than "style", but I assume we  are only addressing DRs and significant shortcomings in the document.]

Murata-san introduced the terms NFC and NFD for the two normalization approaches applied commonly for UNICODE.  We should either spell out in full and prefix with "Unicode" (my preference) or add to Terms and Definitions.

5.  Notational Conventions
Trusting this to Rex.

6.  General Description
Will need to look back at this.  Murata-san's changes have made Annex A informative, for example.

7.  Overview
See my notes on 1. Scope above.

8.  Package Model
Will deal with in separate set of notes apart from a few small details.

There are still several internal references and example captions that need A to be changed to 8.

I assume "EBNF" should be "ABNF".  Latest RFC for ABNF is RFC 5234.  2234 and 4234 are obsolete.

9. Physical Package
10. Core Properties
11.  Thumbnails
No changes have been made.  Will need to check Annex references.

12. Digital Signatures
Ignoring for now.

Annexes
Ignoring from now.  Will make notes on Annex A in conjunction with clause 8.

  Hoping this helps.      Caroline

Caroline Arms
Library of Congress Contractor
Co-compiler of Sustainability of Digital Formats resource
http://www.digitalpreservation.gov/formats/

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From: eb2mmrt at gmail.com [eb2mmrt at gmail.com] On Behalf Of MURATA Makoto [eb2m-mrt at asahi-net.or.jp]
Sent: Thursday, June 26, 2014 11:16 PM
To: SC34
Subject: My personal draft of OPC revision

Dear colleagues,

On the basis of discussions in Prague, I updated my personal
rewrite.  It is available at:

https://www.assembla.com/spaces/IS29500/documents

The first file (OfficeOpenXMLPart2-OpenPackagingConventionsMM0619)
is the draft.

Regards,
Makoto
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