Clause 8.5.5.2 (thoughts based on your online draft as of 1/23)

[caroline arms]

Murata-san,

I see you have been breaking the examples into bullet points.  One
awkwardness that I had noticed is still present --  in the first bullet of
the first relationship.

·       The mode of the first relationship is Internal (default).  Thus,
the base IRI ("pack://http%3c,,www.example.com,ex.opc/foo/test.xml") is the
pack IRI created from the IRI (http://www.example.com/ex.opc) of the
package and the part name "/foo/test.xml".

I would move the parenthesized base IRI to the end of the sentence as

, yielding "pack://http%3c,,www.example.com,ex.opc/foo/test.xml".

    Caroline
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